introductory critique rewrite

This rewrite of my first introductory critique I felt a lot better about because I knew what to expect and how to properly do it. Sometimes on an assignment like this you might not know exactly what to talk about, all the important information you need, or how to write enough stuff and stay on the 1 page limit.

1) I would say that my first written critique was fairly good for my first time doing an assignment like that. The comments and feedback based upon the initial one I wrote was helpful because I knew what I needed to do to make it better and what all needs to be discussed.

2) I know that the detailed summary should be fairly longer then your response because the detailed summary needs elaborate details and more information about the reading. Each point or idea in the executive summary, detailed summary, and response needs its own paragraph. Your response needs to include a outside source tying the reading with it.

3) The most substantive changes that I made were adding more information or details to the detailed summary, giving each point in the sections its own paragraph, and adding an outside source. I did not really have to change much just add more. Continue reading


Critique of Grant Wiggins’ “Seven Keys to Effective Feedback”

TO:          ENGL 3300 E4

CC:           Mark Long

DATE:   02/17/14

FROM:  5300

RE:          Critique of Grant Wiggins “Seven Keys to Effective Feedback” revision

B0006080 Listening to sounds

Author: Royce O’Neale

Executive Summary

Grant Wiggins goes deep into detail about what “feedback” really is by breaking t down into specific characteristics and explains in depth how efficient it can be in the article “Seven Keys to Effective Feedback“.

Feedback is used in comments made after a fact has been stated, advice has been given, praise has been worshipped, and evaluation has been responsive. The essentials of creative and well-equipped feedback are goal-referenced, tangible and transparent, actionable, user-friendly, timely, ongoing, and consistent that all leads up to progression of a goal without time.

Overall he made good arguments in favor of providing feedback for students and gave helpful examples. However it would have been helpful to see how feedback works with students.

Detailed Summary

He mentions that there are certain qualities for feedback that make it successful. Goal- referenced is called effective feedback requires that a person has a goal, takes action to achieve the goal, and receives goal-related information about someone’s actions. Tangible and transparent shows the student that there would be some kind of response to their goal. Actionable feedback means that the student understands what they need to do to fix the issue. Feedback should be user-friendly because students cannot do anything with it if they do not understand it. Feedback should be timely and on going so that students are in the frame of mind to keep working and getting help and it should be consistent so they are learning to complete their goal.


Wiggins does a good job breaking down the characteristics about what effective feedback is. That type of information is encouraging for educators because they see that there is a purpose for giving that response to students. The way he compares feedback vs. advice was helpful in explaining the difference between the two.

The only negative quality was that he did not present how the students actually reacted to feedback. According to Maryellen Weimer “Getting Students to Act on Our Feedback” many students do not change anything because they think the teachers are just justifying the grade that they received. It would be interesting to see his response about how he feels about that by using first hand encounters with students and teachers.

Critique #1 self evaluation

My introductory critique paper received a C+ grade, mainly because I wasn’t too sure how to write a critique or know how it would be graded. I took into consideration off what all I need to do better for next time and make the grade better with comments.

1) I would focus more on adding more details to the detailed summary to make more elaborate and informative. Also take out the questions that were trying to make a point and next time explain what I was trying to get across. Lastly provide an outside source in my response to connect with the reading.

2) Structural wise I would split the paragraphs into different parts for each point to have its own section.

3) Voicing I wouldn’t use first person using I, me, our, or anything that include myself .

4) Overal my spelling and punctuation is good but I would eliminate contractions like won’t and doesn’t. I would also make the executive summary more clear to explain what I am going to be discussing.